Supermeggs12

Aww, this was cute. I think you captured the mindset of a toddler perfectly. I didn't notice any grammar issues, which is impressive. Cons: This piece was very fast paced, ...

It has a very intriguing concept and idea, I like it. Grammatically though, it has room for much improvement. "I live in an apartment building alone but completely alone since ...

I think that for a first chapter, this is very well done! Your prose was lovely, and as a reader I could easily, feel Ashline's physical pain. Growing wings must ...

Lovely hook. I really sympathized with Lia's character, and I especially felt bad at the end. Your descripitions were so beautiful and fluid! I could picture myself at the scene. ...

Some of your sentences sound choppy, so it would to look them over. Try reading the sentences out loud to yourself. I think your plot has potential, however, the chapter ...

I'm sort of confused about what's going on, however, this was quite good! You can understand Reuben's personality through the dialogue, and the way he speaks. He's interesting to me, ...

This is a rather short poem, but that's okay. I think your poem is about the beauty of the morning sky, and I find it lovely. My favorite line was, ...

I love your writing, honestly. And I hate to say this, but your mc sounds like a Mary-Sue. Apparently, she's pretty, very intelligent, and does most sports. I want to ...

Overall, you have a pretty good plot and some interesting characters. But I'll help with grammar. "but we have fond temporary names," You misspelled 'found'. "Please excuse the diffrent languidges. ...

This was phenomenal, however, you really need to space out the paragraphs more because the long paragraphs make it hard to read. I really liked the emotion, your mc is ...

Well, the comment below me pretty much covered all the grammactical aspects of your story. So, I'll just talk about how you can improve your writing... Your story just jumps ...

This is so realistic, it's painful. Your writing is so beautifully honest, I love it! I like how the pov, was told from the perspective of a boy instead of ...

This has potential, but right now, it's pretty choppy. I like the relationship she has with her sister, but it could be more developed.. Per se, maybe the mc feels ...

This was great! Danye, or "Dani" is an interesting character. I don't read very many characters on here that are bisexual, so this is unique! The plot is pretty solid, ...

Hmmm, there's very many of grammatical errors. However, your writing is really raw and honest. I like it. Although, when your interjecting you're mc's thoughts into your prose, you should ...