Superfreakazoid

Thank you both, and evolves was really the word that fit to me, so it's what I put. Backgroundbob got my line of thinking.

Thank you both, and I swear I did the italics thing right, I knew it was suposed to be that way, but I guess I didn't.

Thank you so much!

No, it's not, sorry about that. Curse typos and all their descendants. Yeah, normally I don't like dark stuff like this or write dark stuff like this for that matter, ...

MistyLynn: Thanks, I was hoping it would create some sort of dream-reality. Natyr Lucio: Hee hee, a rather uniue way to describe it, thanks. zelithon: Thank you, glad you enjoyed ...

The Black Rose: Thanks so much. Do you remember me? It's Ramona (ramona_the_karma_chameleon@hotmail.com.) Skye Demon: Thank you. I really appreciate it.

Thanks, all, I'll see if I can revise it (this is a lie, I will think about it then get lazy and not do it.)

Oh, wow! Pseudomuse (I always tought that was the RADICALEST name)? Hey, yeah, it is Ramona.

Imaginaitive, I suppose, putting yourself there, but also cliche. There are a lot of rhymes in this piece that seem to be forced and overall, I think this poem could ...

This is an awesome piece, the format makes it flow so magnificently. It's quite a clever piece, using few words to get a point across. I like it a lot.

I LOVED this. The ship metaphors were beautiful and the fact that you related it all to each other without overdoing it is fantastic.

seems kind of plain. But perhaps the simplicity is what makes the poem. I think these are the most promising lines: "She put a tear in her skin that night ...

Hee, clever. I like the format you used.

It's very cliche but I think if you did try harder you could produce a very nice piece.

Ha ha, cute in a preschool kind of way. Of course now it's stuck in my head.