Summerless

I've never read anything about a gay teenage romance story, but this one was quite interesting and good. There were important details and none of the sentences were out of ...

It does sound like it is from a girl's perspective so you pass :] I couldn't find any typos or grammatical errors. The voice is pretty strong. This is well ...

I like the little intro thing you draw us all in with. I can totally relate myself to her. Everything is so cute and I like the reality of this. ...

Nice. Thanks for the smiley. You rock my socks off too. :] Just a few things. You don't need to have a comma in sentence two. And I thought Ron ...

I, personally, like to read Twilight fanfiction in first person (probably because Stephenie Meyer wrote hers that way). It's pretty good except the fact that you are telling us everything. ...

Nice title. That was what drew me in to read your poem. I like the overall sound of it, but maybe consider a little bit of word arrangement in line ...

Hey, deafwriter, that was awesome. Maybe a little bit of an overuse with the word "sexy"--try seductive, alluring, foxy, luscious--but overall it was fine (for lack of a better word). ...

Hahaha, I'm reviewing your sonnet since you reviewed mine. First of all, it was humorous. I love the "meese" and "geese" part. I'm adding it to my imaginary dictionary. Sorry ...

I love the style. It's quite creative and you keep the same style through out, which is good. I only have one critique. In line four you have "the pain ...

I think this is phenomenal, deafwriter_19! You used powerful vocabulary to describe Chester Matheson (by the way, I love the name!) like "emaciated" and "vulnerable," which made the reader understand ...