Sujana

Some Errors I Thought Might Be Notable: -"The mongol felt like he should kill him or let him run off then the Mongol thought how China worked." Thought of how ...

I couldn't find any notable mistakes in grammar or spelling that bothered me, which is actually quite good. More works should proofread themselves, just so that we can talk more ...

Some Grammar Fixes and the Like: -"It was a lot lighter then it looked so that happened a lot." Than. -"She lead her to a bench on the far wall." ...

-"As the footsteps got closer he heard a voice “You left the door open, show yourself”." I suggest using something along the lines of 'As the footsteps got closer, he ...

This was cute. Like, really, really cute. I'm surprised I didn't die of the cuteness of the situation, because I am about as sensitive to cuteness as most humans are ...

I admire your sense of humor. It's grotesque, black, borderline psychotic, but at the same time it's never unentertaining. I recently got off a work that was extremely deep and ...

I'm not sure how to review this work, mostly because I doubt it can be reviewed. It's an almost inhuman piece, a mastery of show and tell, yet I leave ...

- "I said said" Repeated word. Minus one said. -"if we didn’t stop farmingwe would run out of food." Farming, we would run out of food. -"The only thing that ...

-"It was nice cool evening when the whole family was getting ready to go to sleep when the Dad realized that he forgot Fighto outside, so he went to get ...

What a peculiar story. There was a moment in this very green room where there were a flood of works set entirely in ancient China, talking about various things such ...

I have a feeling that I really ought to read more of your works. They always intrigue me, like an ordinary conversation built entirely off of hidden intentions and broken ...

-"It all starts very near the Sung Dynasty in China." Is it Song or Sung? Or are those interchangeable? -"Every time a harvest comes he has to give up most ...

This was a very cool piece, and I scarcely ever say that anymore. Take the like I've given you as an indication of something special, or my tendency towards midnight ...

This should be an interesting piece. Is it a non-fiction, or do you intend to have characters and stories involved in this? The ideology we see here could make a ...

There's definitely a nice air of adventure in this, and the motivation of the characters are very clear. As much as I like a story that has many goals and ...