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  • Other » General, General Re: Is giving up alright?

    Hello, Spartan118! I usually don't like reading poems (I'm reading more on YWS nowadays), but this one was clear and simple and easy to understand, but it leaves room for ...

    Apr 25, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: The Reckless Years: Chapter 1 Part 1

    Hello, BubblegumGoddess! Beautiful chapter you have here! I really want to know what happens next. Just a few minor concerns: "Together we stood up and walked back over to the ...

    Apr 21, 2017
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Foster

    Hello! I have to say, this is a beautiful little story! It's so captivating and I just love the little interactions that each character has with one another. Just a ...

    Apr 20, 2017
  • Short Story » General, Teen Fiction Re: My Seveenteenth Birthday

    Hello, Quieen! I love the concept. I feel like, it's just so 'cute' in the beginning. I felt like it would be any ordinary romance story, but I was surprised ...

    Apr 19, 2017
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Mirror talk

    Hello, zerorest1game! Profound lyrics here! I mean, woah! Okay, just a few minor things here. In the first stanza: "Don't let it get to deep it's toxic, Slow down hear ...

    Apr 10, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Nona - Chapter 1 Part 1

    Hello! Beautiful prologue, I have to say! Just a few things I want to say: 1) Are you sure you want to keep this as a prologue? It seems more ...

    Apr 10, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: .

    Oooh! Such a beautiful poem! I feel like I can just see the man in front of me, with a sad expression frozen on his face. Anyway, there are only ...

    Apr 2, 2017
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, Fantasy Re: Persephone's Prophecy

    Hello, brooklyn193! This is a really good concept you took, and wove into a little story! It's cool looking at things from Persephone's point of view. Just a few suggestions, ...

    Mar 30, 2017
  • Other » General, General Re: Log 201: A letter from Adam

    Nice! I really want to see what happens next! Here's what was a little confusing though, you used quite a few unfamiliar terms. I suppose you can't 'explain' really, in ...

    Mar 29, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Innocence

    Beautiful poem! I love how you summed up what basically every human on Earth seems to go through at some point or the other (or maybe not...). The last line ...

    Mar 28, 2017


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