StoryWeaver13

Really good, really sad...I think Isha already pointed out pretty well what needed to be fixed, so I'm not going to reiterate. One word of advice, though: don't ever sacrifice ...

I liked it all except for the last couple of lines-- She pretends to like them, and goes so far that they won't suspect, the grisly fate which awaits them. ...

I see a lot of people critisizing the lack of spacing...are you having problems with that like I am? I mean, I put spacings for the original and such, but ...

Hi there. :D I was seven years old when I first met my older sister, my deceased older sister. I would make this more dramatic, something like "I was seven ...

*Liked This was awesome. I think I held my breath through the whole thing. I read trying to plot out a dozen different typical scenarios as to how this was ...

Hey there, The beginning felt a little rocky to me (beginnings are so hard some times, aren't they?) but like Duskglimmer said, it smoothed out nicely. Dustglimmer covered this really ...

Well I suppose you're tired of hearing this by now, and I'm sorry if I sound like a broken record, but the poem is hard to understand. I also don't ...

*Liked I really love this...your wording's beautiful and while romances typically seem so boring to me I really like this one. It pretty much avoids cliche (hard in this field ...

You know, I really don't get the critisisms. This was a good poem, and the message was great, too. I thought the rhyme was off a beat or two in ...

*Liked :lol: This made me laugh, it was really a random, crazy sort of way. I never thought anyone could merge WWIII, "Cullenism" (haha wow...) and Sarah Palin into one ...

Yay, finally a novel that's got my complete interest! The title made this irresistably tempting to read...and from the first couple of sentences I was hooked on your characters' personality. ...

Hey there, He was truly passionate about the instrument. This sentence just seemed kind of an obvious, bland statement. Maybe you could end on another note? (Oops, no pun intended... ...

There's a lot of dialogue and not a lot of details. Action/adventures are supposed to be fast-paced and exciting, but you also have to add enough detail for people to ...

His condition was growing rapidly Was growing? I think something along the lines of "rapidly deteriorating" would suit it better. Other than that, I didn't really catch anything. I think ...

Controversial subjects can make or break a poem, story, etc., and you might get negative or mixed reviews partially because of that. I thought it was a decent poem, though. ...