StoryWeaver13

This is a nice poem, it has a certain simplicity to it. I think you should use some punctuation, though, and "then" should be "than" in the last stanza. Other ...

Tears only fall in private This was the only line I didn't like. Other than that, I thought it was a really emotional (and kind of morbidly chilling) piece. Your ...

Hey. First off, sorry to hear what happened to your horse. I have a horse of my own, but it's so difficult because I can rarely see her. *Sighhh* The ...

I actually really liked it. It was so cool, especially because that's kind of how my own train of thought typically works...but I think it was really fun and I ...

There are parts I like and parts I don't. Sometimes I thought, "Oh, great, another teenage angst poem about some morbidly depressed emo person." But at the same time, I ...

Hey there. You did a pretty good job from the guy's perspective I think, me being the tomboyish type who is constantly around guys and all. So, yeah, no real ...

Being from Idaho also, I can totally relate and these are definately things I love so much, especially the star garnets because I've always thought that was so cool. But ...

I used to know -- no, think -- I was a normal girl. I would wouldn't have the "know" there...but you know, I think you could come up with a ...

Hey there. She taped her pencil on the desk Did you mean tapped? waiting for the day to end . The rules on grammar aren't so strict with poetry, but ...

I thought this was cool and it felt free; it didn't feel like you were determinedly bound to a certain rhyme scheme, like many try to do. Like Suzanne, I ...

Yeah, like the other writer said, it just kind of lacked a consistancy. If I were you I would take away the rhyming completely, because really a poem doesn't have ...

Wow, and all this time I just thought my cat was lazy...I didn't know that he was actually on a path to enlightenment! :lol: This was really funny, and I ...

It's kinda hard to review something so short, but I'll give it a shot anyway. I thought about what I had did Grammar! "Had did" should be either "about what ...

I thought the beginning was nice, sweet, and clever, but I thought it fell apart more towards the ending. The line "Now your really an angel horse but you had ...

To be honest, this sounded like more of a teenage angst poem than anything else. "I hate this, I hate that, etc." It just makes you sound like yet another ...