StoryWeaver13

I agree with the last reviewer who said it kinda just needed some more emotion. I think the reason it wasn't emotional is because you told us what was going ...

I liked this; the fact that it was short and simple didn't effect the subtle impact it had, I actually didn't mind the fact that the last line was a ...

OK, I feel like being picky, so bear with me...:D Droplets of sun fell between softly rustling leaves, dancing over a young woman’s upturned face. She breathed heavily, pulling the ...

LOVE IT!!! I only had a few things that kinda bugged me... The first was the clothing description of the first whatever-it-is. The way you called a t-shirt "short" just ...

This didn't have a whole lot of impact on me personally, but to each his own, right? Anyway, since I'm still reviewing, my basic thought was that you never really ...

Yeah there's not a lot to review because it's so short, but there is something really refreshing about it...quirky, somebody already said, and I think that sums it up perfectly. ...

Well I'm the oldest kid in my family, but I still know how this sort of thing feels - it's weird when someone suddenly transforms to become someone else, and ...

I like it. I wish there was some way to know how you hear it, you know what I mean? Because the sound is *obviously* an important element of a ...

I think this did too much direct telling, like there wasn't really any depth to it, and because of that it felt lacking, and too typical of a piece. I ...

*applause* I follow you because of your artwork, but I think I'll have to keep a sharper eye out for your writing too now, because I'm really hooked. If I'm ...

I don't like the way things keep repeating through the poem, it makes it lose its momentum and it never really struck a chord with me. I think you need ...

First off, welcome to YWS! And what a great first piece to start with. ;) Anyway, I really like this, the imagery is beautiful and the whole concept is just ...

Not bad, but you could do so much to expand on it. You really kind of ran through a brainstorm of "is it this?" but never really gave us time ...

Huh, I really like this. You pretty much defeated all the things I hate about stupid romances - it wasn't sappy, cliche, and awkward to read. Also, the relationship felt ...

There's something really pure and honest about this poem that I like, and I think it shows a lot of innocence (like a lot of religious poems do...which is a ...