*one of the songs i made for my story, Four Little Words.
It was the loveliest afternoon,
I held your hand and looked in your eyes
I promised you we'll make it through
We can both take over the world.
We're taking chances, ready for changes
We'll keep going on, we'll keep holding on
We're almost there, I can see the light--
But why did you let go of my hand?
[chorus]
Oh, is something wrong with me?
You know I love you but you chose to leave
Oh, don't you believe in me?
I guess that's just the way things should be
I can see that you're happy now
Maybe I was never the right one for you.
I just hope he makes you smile
The way no one else does, no one else does
You can say goodbye, and I'll be fine
Close this story and start on your own
While I keep asking myself
[chorus]
[bridge]
This will be our last summer together
Farewell now, goodbye to forever.
This will be our last summer together
Farewell now, we didn't last forever
[chorus]
I guess that's just the way things should be
Between you and me.
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I like it. I wish there was some way to know how you hear it, you know what I mean? Because the sound is *obviously* an important element of a song haha. All the same, I think the lyrics are hard-hitting and relateable, and I think with the right beat it cold be a really good song.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver
NICE SONG.
you really should get a life. SERIOUSLY.