StoryWeaver13

That's why she survived it – or maybe something in her died that was going to kill her. No, she has green eyes – she was never going to die ...

This was definately a new idea, and I really like the perspective. If there's just one thing I'd say to lighten up on the italics, because it's sort of a ...

Bullies are terrible - even the bullies that don't attack you from the outside. All the same, this poem was lacking something. The rhyme scheme was restricting and sing-songy, and ...

Well I think the people before me did a good job of taking this piece-by-piece, so I guess I'll just sum it up. It was pretty good, although there were ...

Well I think the rhyme scheme weighed you down. It didn't fit the mood of the poem really, and it binded you to use certain words and kept you from ...

a red rose tears all over my eyes as red as the rose First of all, sorry, but roses are such a cliche. I see them in too many poems ...

When the Pearly Gates will not let them pass And the flames of Hell are out of their grasp The dark world of Limbo's shore awaits them Them? Who's them? ...

Well, this was alright as far as poems go. It just felt like it was lacking some depth...and maybe expanding on the whole theme of it would just be helpful, ...

Maya carefully shut the ancient books of spells by Xavier Bloodrose as she watched her majestic amethyst - eyed raven perch on her small, wooden windowsill. On its leg was ...

Well what can I say that hasn't been said? This is a good piece of poetry, especially for somebody who doesn't write a lot of it. But I could kind ...

Okay, so I usually *hate* short-lined poems because they feel all choppy, but this one actually flowed pretty well. I don't know why, but it felt different in its own ...

LOVE your character so far. There's a dry, witty humor that is really cool. Do you know how many people try to be funny and then their "comical" character just ...

This is so relateable to me personally (and a lot of other people, I'm sure) and even though she's so self-defacing I do like her character pretty well. I guess ...

I actually really like this. The voice was simple but effective, and it had a lot of clever little twists and turns through it that was pretty stellar. As far ...

Whoa I'm in love with the song, and your voice! *Jealous* haha. Really, perfect. You play guitar well too. I totally relate to the song also, and there's seriously nothing ...