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The whole thing about pandas was a nice twist. I like it!

Good job.

I like this. It gives an accurate portrait of how a survivor would feel.

Wow. That was powerfully written.

My advice is not to clump everything together. Separate each paragraph by at least one line.

Good job. The poem was well written and gave a clear sense of the king's defeat.

Good job, Fl.

Wow. That was beautiful.

That's the thing, see. He's a boarding student. I agree about the jump though; I'll post the rest of chapter one.

The weirdest-and the coolest- is the Kingdom Keepers.

Yeah, I saw Treausre Planet. Story was well done, and they adapted it to space well.

I know. The Souring of the Shire and the Old Forest are important, I think. The only thing is, it would make each movie 4 or 5 hours long. I ...

That was brilliant. I liked the part when it says, "the apple that even He couldn't sell."

Good job, Sachiko! I loved it.

I don't know about you, but most villains in my experience don't admit that they commit crimes or that they are evil. What they do seems right to them. Anyway, ...