SpiritedWolfe

Hi Yoshikrab! Back for another review on your novel ^^ So, this chapter feels like it's broken up into two distinct parts. The first is Silvan's first exposure to being ...

Hi Ducklin! Here to review as requested :) As a whole, I liked this chapter. I think you've got an interesting concept, you've dropped some hints about where the plot ...

Hi, Yoshikrab! Back for another part :) There was a lot to learn in this chapter, and a lot of information thrown at us at once. I'm a little disappointed, ...

Hi yumi! First of all, I agree with MissGangamash that the first paragraph is repetitive, and by the third or fourth sentence, it feels like the metaphor is dragging on. ...

Hi Mage! I saw the background about this poem on your wall, and I was really interested in seeing how you’d express your feelings. I love the idea behind this ...

Hi Yoshikrab! Back for another review :) I like that we have another perspective character here! The transition between the previous chapter and this one is really neat, since you ...

Hi there! Since this seems to be an excerpt from the middle of a larger piece, it makes sense that there would be some things that were a little confusing, ...

Hi Yoshikrab! I'm here to leave a review on the first entry in your novel :) So for starters, I think that this is a good start to your story! ...

Hi BlackThorne! First of all, I'm coming into this very late, but I still wanted to offer my thoughts on your work, so hopefully it's of some use to you! ...

Hi Mea! Let's just get into it :) The nerve of him! Asking her if she wanted some meat right after she nearly threw up from seeing those bloody entrails ...

Hi Mea! Let's just jump right into it. But he couldn’t possibly be lower-ranked than he was — they weren’t even drakes! I think one of these he's should be ...

Hi Yumi! Welcome to YWS :) For all intents and purposes, I will review your work like it is an essay and focus my feedback around your writing. ShadowVyper pointed ...

Hi again, Sunny! I want to start off by saying that this was a little bit difficult to read because of the grammar issues, as well as some punctuation and ...

Hi Sunny-duckling! Welcome to YWS! I saw your second chapter in the Green Room and wanted to leave one here too :) So, I wanted to leave some general comments ...

Hi, sheyren! Finally here to give you a review on your piece :) Sorry for the delay! I want to start off by saying that I think you have a ...