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Hi! Beautiful start, very intriguing! But I'm going right into the meat of it as I'm in a bit of a hurry. Victor gazed his eyes down at the letter ...

This definetly has some potiental as a novel. It's cool because it's kind of a recurring theme in todays fiction, but you manage it in a new way. And it's ...

Mmmm. This is good stuff you got here. Let us see if I can play a small part in this greatness, shall we? Always spin the same direction. Because they ...

Hello. This is... intriguing to say the least. I have to agree with In_The_Moonlight that the small intro you have doesn't really seem like a preface. The reason for this ...

Just letting you know that I'm yet another reader who has grown addicted to this story. I'm taking six classes right now, but after my next one I'll try to ...

Now you did kill Gave 'ol satan a thrill Now you did kill And it's killing you still Those are some suggestions. The idea is okay, but I personally didn't ...

Mmmm. Completly satisfying. It's rare that such a short peice of writing can have such a physical effect on me. Wonderful! Some little tips, though, because I'm trying to be ...

Well. With so many reviews before me, most of what I saw has been covered so I don't really feel the need to repeat. There is just one little tiny ...

Well. The reviews here seem pretty harsh. While I admit, the idea has been done time and time again, that doesn't make it any less true. And writing the same ...

Wow. Wonderful. I liked the beginning, but the end was awesome, and the middle was intricate. stable and wonderful, perfect and known to everyone, pinned in words against a page, ...

Well. It was certainly horrifying, which was obviously the goal here. So, success, I suppose! The only comments I can make are pointing out the lines I really like, which ...

Best advice for this poem would have to be edit. Here's a few little mistakes that really interupted the flow for me. In the first verse, I beleive that 'spec' ...

It was okay. A few things though took away from the power. When a poem is that short it has grab you by the shirt front, throw you in the ...

The characters aren't fully developed, but you didn't have much time to do so. I actually think Marcus had a very real personality considering what a short time you had ...

I actually disagree. I loved the last two lines. My main problem with this peice was that it was rather.... done. You know. And while almost anything you write will ...