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Hey, Thomas here. I like this quite a lot, there were a few things which you could have done better. You spent quite a bit of time/space describing stuff when ...

This was so good! Me and @dreamy have been working together (sort of) too. I knew she was lying when she said she was bad at writing poems. :D This ...

This was quite nice, but there were so many mistakes. "I lay awake with wide open eyes" this should have been " I lay awake with my eyes wide open" ...

This is really good! The only mistakes I picked up on have already been mentioned by @Aravis10. Other than that the story was amazing and the last line had me ...

I read the first two paragraphs, and thought they were amazing. Even the third chapter was going well until you started describing how he ate his own heart. It just ...

I'm a little confused. You're either a genius, or you're just running out of stuff to write about :P But I think whether you meant to or not, you created ...

This was so good. I can only imagine how much investigation you did before writing this. This just took me back to the Egyptian civilization, and I loved it. There ...

Wow, this was great. It made me feel all nice inside and the way you described everything made me feel like I was there. I'm not going to say anything ...

Hey Dark, just going through your stuff when I found this masterpiece! It made me feel all gooey inside at the beginning and the last line made me laugh my ...

This is really great! But I think what you missed out on is the inverted commas when the beast screeched. :D good luck with your next few articles, keep up ...