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Re: Destiny - Part 3
Good work yet again. A lot of the good things I said still stand. The plot is still well made and shows a good story plot. I also like how ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: Destiny - Part 2
As I said before, great writing. The text has good flow and is well written. The dialogue and thoughts are realistic and move along the plot. The plot is also ...
Dec 14, 2012 -
Re: Destiny - Part 1
Great story. I like how you gave an inside view of a person with supernatural powers. Nice flow and thought process. The story feels real and as if it were ...
Dec 14, 2012 -
Re: My Mathematics Exam
Nice writing. The reading was a little boring, but was a new subject used in writing for me to see, so I still enjoyed it. There were small typos, like ...
Dec 12, 2012 -
Re: Invisible Stars (Paley's Stars)
You gave me a review a while back, so I figured I'd return the favor. This is a nice small poem and has a nice, yet short, structure. The subject ...
Dec 12, 2012 -
Re: The Sphere
Great poetry. I like this poems design and imagery. The reading is smooth and fluent and well done. The classic aabb rhyme scheme always looks nice in poetry. The imagery ...
Dec 11, 2012 -
Re: Hush now, we don't want any accidents.
I think this is a good post. I like how you make the reader think and how the view makes a person remember some of the crazy things they thought ...
Dec 2, 2012 -
Re: A Wizard's Best Friend: Part 2/2
Terrific ending to the story. I like how everyone survived in the end and how she killed the lich. The lines "My pen-knife was a flash of silver as it ...
Nov 8, 2012 -
Re: A Wizard's Best Friend: Part 1/2
This was a great story so far and a pleasure to read. I love how you turned the normal "boogeyman" and monsters childhood scares into a new and creative way. ...
Nov 8, 2012 -
Re: Islander and Lucinda
Great story. I geniunely enjoyed it. I love the creativity that the story shows and that you gave it a decent ending. The story is definately worth writing and reading ...
Nov 7, 2012 -
Re: Love at its Best
Great writing. I like how you made a simple exchange of a present into a narrative of how the gift felt. The imagery is amazing and the general idea of ...
Oct 16, 2012 -
Re: Leisure of Mind
Great writing. This is a new way to see someone put voices in their head into words or into a unique work about people who have voices. I feel like ...
Oct 16, 2012 -
Re: Fire
Great poetry, I can see emotion in the righting. One negative is a lack of rhyme, unless the writing is going for a more generic original feel. Definitely original.
Oct 15, 2012
