Sometimesinbetween

Loved this! :D I do agree with Rieda though that it needs some puncuation. The foggy shadow emerges A ghostly ship of lore Loved this line! This has great potential! ...

I liked this it a lot! :D I couldn't find anything wrong the puncuation or grammer. Tell me you love me, 'Cause I've never been wanted. Love this line. Great ...

Hey this was good! I liked it. I just caught a couple things I thought might be typos. :D How do you Decide between The two You call you Friends? ...

Hi! This was really good! :) Here's a couple of things I caught: “In that thing?” She questioned, her eyes roaming over the rust and puttering of the weak engine. ...

I liked this a lot, it flowed so well! Tread lightly when you talk to her measure out your words Loved this. There was only one comma and one period ...

Hey, this was pretty good! :) Just a couple of things with the punctuation. The last time someone died. Should this have a period after it? This isn't a complete ...

Ok, a couple typos, but otherwise this is great! :D Of course he fared much better then I. 'then' should be 'than'. I found out after I stepped of the ...

Hey, this was good! I only caught two things with the punctuation: Oh attractive shadow how your cool blue hues There should be a comma after 'shadow'. Slowly creeping over ...

This is very pretty! :D However there is a complete lack of punctuation. Was that intentional? The moon weeps for her friends absents Is this supposed to be 'absence'? Great ...

This was really good. I really liked the rythm. It was different, but good. One part didn't seem to flow for me: An echo Of a dangerous beauty. Causing babes ...

I liked this. I loved the way the person fought within himself. You did a really great job with that. The opening wasn't effective as it could have been. Maybe ...

Wow, that was sad! :cry: I liked it a lot. The comparison to a tornado was cool. I'm not great at grammer, but I caught two things I thought might ...

I liked it! :) Great description. There's just one point that didn't seem to flow quite as well. Her lonesome eyes stir voices from the grave, I really like this ...