Young Writers Society

Hi,
Wonderful poem. It was very pretty. I really liked. It was a nice short read. Make sure you re-read your work before posting it. Then you can find grammar and punctuation errors. It would be nice if it was a bit longer. Expand it. Then it will not just be amazing but truly amazing.

Keep Writing!

-lg*

I liked it.
Would love it to be a bit longer though.

Keep up the good work!

Yeah! This is an awesome little poem!

Yeah, punctuation is an issue but people have already covered that.

I liked this, it conjured up some great story lines and imagery, but I think you could have one; made it a little bit longer and two; make it clearer. I liked the idea but I didn't really grasp what you were trying to write about. I think you could have structured it in a more poetic sense to, as I found you were telling me and not showing me.

Mischief x

I agree that it needs some punctuation, but wow, that was really beautiful. I love its simplicity, really great job.

yes i didnt put any punctuation cause i was in a really big hurry

This is very pretty! However there is a complete lack of punctuation. Was that intentional?

The moon weeps for her friends absents