I stand in woods
Watching the full-moon
There are no stars in the sky
The moon weeps for her friends absence
She calls for them
Still no stars
She calls again
Still no stars
Then a glow apears in the distance
They have arived
The dancing stars
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Hi,
Wonderful poem. It was very pretty. I really liked. It was a nice short read. Make sure you re-read your work before posting it. Then you can find grammar and punctuation errors. It would be nice if it was a bit longer. Expand it. Then it will not just be amazing but truly amazing.
Keep Writing!
-lg*
I liked it.
Would love it to be a bit longer though.
Keep up the good work!
Yeah! This is an awesome little poem!
Yeah, punctuation is an issue but people have already covered that.
I liked this, it conjured up some great story lines and imagery, but I think you could have one; made it a little bit longer and two; make it clearer. I liked the idea but I didn't really grasp what you were trying to write about. I think you could have structured it in a more poetic sense to, as I found you were telling me and not showing me.
Mischief x
I agree that it needs some punctuation, but wow, that was really beautiful. I love its simplicity, really great job.
yes i didnt put any punctuation cause i was in a really big hurry
This is very pretty!
However there is a complete lack of punctuation. Was that intentional?
Is this supposed to be 'absence'?
Great job!
-Sometimes-