Someguy

Yip I love to fight... I see what you mean, but you didn't show us that it can look after itself. If you can explain to us in your fancy ...

I like the beginning. You changed a few parts which is nice and you actually let John speak a little more creatively! :wink: Again, the entire butterfly metaphor thing is ...

I see. Okay... WHAT!?!?! Nah just joking. No I see your point and everything and it is good. I'm just one of those who doesn't see ourselves as gods and ...

I see now. Still, you need to make it more clear, because people like me(The idiot) needs help to understand. :P :P :P :P :P

I liked it. Very nice. Well since it is early in the morning and my brain isn't functioning, I'll critique it later. :lol:

A bit short. I think u could lengthen it. I like the idea and where it's going, but ended randomly. You must continue working on it. :)

This was a bit random... I expected more.

It's nice, where u go and use a ABCB rhyme scheme and then all of the it changes in the last stanza. Pretty cool. I like the way you always ...

This would actually make a good song. I liked it. At the end where you show that the love has been 'lost'. It's pretty good. :)

Um... I'll go easy on you cause you're new. Well...? So short and pointless, no offence. There is a lot of potential and you are not using it. Just keep ...

Okay... random... It didn't really make sense, I mean there was here and there but still, you should make it more clear to who is speaking.

It was funny...

This was really really good. The ending was brilliant and the message you're trying to show is great and so deep. Really good.

I really like it, the flow was fantastic and the word choice and all those things and... Really like it. Keep up the good work

Very cool, it gives you the kinda feeling that makes you feel the pain it is feeling. Very cool.