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This actually reminds of a game I played. Project Zero: The tormented I like it. Very nice. It's hard to say which one I really like, but the first one ...

I like it very nice. :wink: There is a few parts I don't like though... am I breathing? I sent it in for one of my school projects with these ...

Cool, cool. I liked it. Very deep. hehe. Till I saw a signnnnnn It is weird. signnnnnn. Well I'm a sucker, so please explain to me what you meant by ...

This is great!!!! It's been a long time (No offense towards the other writers. I'm actually including myself.) since I read such a great poem. If there were a bunch ...

Wow, wow. The end... :wink: I like it. Well same mistakes in the first chapter. You really need to work on your punctuation, etc. because in the end, it doesn't ...

Okay. I think it's a good beginning and that U have a nice idea.(Concerning chapter 1) The present going towards the past was a bit thrown on the ground if ...

I have to agree with Vernon. The spacing is a bit funky. :P It is nice. I like the idea where you write about it,but I think(and you don't have ...

I liked it. Pretty awesome. You should add stanzas, 'cause when I first saw this I felt,' I don't feel like reading this' It just makes it easier to read. ...

This was a strong poem. You came in and threw all your pain and anger on it. That's what I like about it. Everyone pretty much said what I wanted ...

Well... It's nice, but let me tell you now. This poem needs a massive expansion! I get what you're trying to say, it's just that it's not given clearly like ...

I don't like rap. I despise it. I can't stand the beat that keeps playing over and over and over... But this was freaking crazy. Dude! For once I'm gonna ...

My method to know if it's a good lyric is to kinda make your own 'song' with the lyric, but I couldn't do it with this lyric. I tried really ...

I thought is was a nice poem. Really into depth with the peace. :wink: The rhyme scheme was a bit strange. I think you should pay more attention to that. ...

I really, really liked it! I am really interested in World War 1 and 2 and you just gave me another reason. There is so much you can say, whether ...

I don't know. I don't like short poems. I feel you can say so much more, but that's just me. I like a sonnet. I see what you were trying ...