Sohini

Thanx all!! All your suggestions are really valuable.

Wow...the poem is really good, but i don't think Snaape could have written it. Anyway, the yearning for Lily and the lonilness has been well brought out.

it's a pretty orinary love poem with not much originality. the meter is also not up to the mark .

th eentire series is truly enchanting. the concept of fantasies wa sreally brought out well here. i loved the ending too and teh way Aslan sang to begin Nrnia. i ...

Hey that was really wonderful. the lyrics was powerful and hard-rock will do it even more!

Punctuate and capitalize youur poem. The poem was good but in a repetative kind of way but i enjoued the first line—that's a great opening and a wonderful simile.

Glad that Big Sis liked my crit. XD

I agree with Wiggy. this does seem like a oddly-written story and not much of a poem. some lines are too big, you ought to keep the meter in mind.

hey, this is a charming poem...really touching and warm. Grandmas are soo special.

That was such a new kind of a poem! i liked it and the rhythm's cool too.

A nice light-mooded kind of poem that paints a picture. now you should do a cat poem!!

Way too random.

hey, this war really good and very different. i like the theme and when it's dragons it's always grand.

Charlotte's Web is a wrong nomination here, sorry.

none of Roald Dahl is here? he surely fits the bill for 50years thingy, right? this is an outrage!