Snowfire

Hi! Yes, this is a review... The most obvious problem with this title is that there is no story to go with it. Where did it go?? Not to tell ...

Wow that is a lot of words... whew! This story has a lot of unique quality. Very original, I like how clearly you were able to display the emotions of ...

Hey! The way you build the story works pretty well. It's a common plot starter to run into the popular girl on the first day, but it was easily balanced ...

It's nice. There are a few grammatical errors although, it's not overwhelming yet hard to understand. Is there supposed to be some kind of moral or turning point to this ...

This is really good so far. I haven't even read the intro and already OutKast drew me in. However there were a couple of grammatical errors and I can tell ...

Your story could use a little more emotion. I don't mean like it's boring or anything just that the story don't really give a clear enough picture for the reader. ...

This sounds like the beginning of a good story, your foreshadowing makes me want to know what is happening. There were only two things that confused me about your story ...