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Re: Running
*Moved to Other Fiction*
Oct 6, 2007 -
Re: Suicide announced as "Died Alone"
Ahh, this is much better! :D
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: FREAKY SPAGHETTI
I always knew that Daniel had vanity issues. Aw... but we love Danny! :D
Sep 25, 2007 -
Re: Prental Advisory-Explicit Content
Wait... aren't "bitches" females? Why are you refering to this guy as a bitch? Or maybe you got the wrong gender? It's kind of confusing.
Sep 24, 2007 -
Re: need ur critics for my writting . . .
*Moved to Nonfiction*
Sep 24, 2007 -
Re: THE BLUE KING - CHAPTER SIXTEEN
Hehe, but YWS is a little more strict about it. This is just a mite too revealing. ;) *rated R*
Sep 15, 2007 -
Re: The Triumph of Jarkuu
Moved to Narrative Poetry! :D
Sep 15, 2007 -
Re: Life
The rhymes are forced and, because you are concentrating on rhyming so much, there is no meaning behind the poem. Throw this away and try again. You can do better.
Sep 11, 2007 -
Re: Love's Last Wish
Aww... this is kind of sad. The only thing that really bugs me is that it seems to go from first person to third. So... is the narrator of the ...
Sep 9, 2007 -
Re: Methamphetamines
And... now there is nothing to critique. LOCKED.
Sep 9, 2007 -
Re: Silence, please: A cry for action
Who is your audience? :? The argument seems a little shaky, in any case.
Sep 6, 2007 -
Re: Not all men are pigs
Too bad not more men are pigs. The world would be a prettier place. But yeah. Too many weird rhymes! I must bash you on the head with a rhyming ...
Sep 6, 2007 -
Re: Cute little piggies and a new layout!
Now it's not white and blue! :o What do you guys think?
Sep 2, 2007 -
Re: Retrospect: A Mix for Hourglass [Part I]
Did I mention how awesome this is? Because it's awesome.
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: Fall Out With Yourself
This poem doesn't work because it doesn't have a conclusion. What did you intend to say? :?
Aug 30, 2007