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Is it just me, or are dreams the hardest things to critique? LOL! this dreary, wet dungeon, that seems never ending. Too many dots! And you have all these adjectives ...

I know why it seemed contemporary! *waves hand in the air* Because you described the click of the gun! See? That implies modern rifles, not muskets. Or blunderbusses. But really... ...

Ah! Finally! It looks like your computer swallowed up the words again, most likely because it's on overtype mode. Overtype is your enemy; turn it off. For example, just because ...

^_^ First of all, I love horses. With a passion. When I read something like this, it instantly puts me in a gentler mood and, unless there is horrible description ...

"I know, but the sooner we take care of this the better off she'll be." Interesting. These parents seem based on my own. And Emily seems a lot like me. ...

And maybe meet a unicorn, she added silently. She'd never seen a real unicorn. They didn't exist, but no one had ever told her a thing like that. It's not ...

Okay! I read it. Or, more likely, reread it. There were some spelling errors, but you can go through that on Word and find them. There were some sentences that ...

I hate it. But then again, what do you expect from someone who likes very short sentences that are brief and to the point? These kind of pieces are really ...

First of all, I'm not good a poetry. Next of all, I tend to like structured poetry a lot. With that in mind, my opinions may or may not be ...

:shock: I helped you with this! Er... that is... not in that way. Pretty cool. That one paragraph is still a little awkward, but much better in context.

I read it! Yay! My first story in a couple of weeks! Er... I'm done celebrating. Good points: I read this all the way through. You might laugh at that, ...

And when as light through trees Doth reach kind earth below Warming the soil and bidding the unborn iris "Grow!" Her thoughts bloomed in beautiful blasphemy 'Till she cried out ...

I read it. What happened to Lanie made me cringe... That's a good thing. Nitpicks: Check the commas and see if they're necessary. I noticed a couple that seemed out ...

Hmm... this reminds me of a video game plot I made up! Or... at least made a comic of. *suddenly grows red* Okay! Follow Rei's instructions and you will be ...

It's hard to offer good criticism from what we see of it so far. It's rather bare, and we're not sure enough of the characters to tell who is saying ...