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Half-werewolf? I thought you were either full werewolf or nothing. :P Nah, it's your story. Some of it was a bit strange... the parts you described, it sounded like the ...

Hey Quippie! First of all, the poem's text is hideously small. I can barely read it. I don't know if this is your attention (maybe you don't want me to ...

Stop telling us what it won't do and focus on what it does do! Focusing on what it doesn't do doesn't give us a clear picture of the storm, how ...

The good thing is, this thing is short and sweet! Unfortunately, when we read this poem, we finish it and think, "Okay... now what?" You don't really give us enough ...

One of the things that I think is missing is us knowing whether he's dead in the first place. If he is dead, then lose the "followed" in "Behind her, ...

LOL! You kids are crazy! And of course, it amuses me that captain.classy gives a full review... of course! YWS has trained you well. :P One thing: She praised my ...

Hi Katie! Figured I would critique this one. :) Anyway, for the most part, I really liked the poem. Some of it was a little strange, of course. For instance, ...

Did somebody say brutal? :D I'm confused! It would be better to describe who this witch is, what role she played in the story, and why she would kill the ...

Hey Tayla! One thing that kind of confused me... which concentration camp is this? I mean, I'm assuming it's a Nazi-run concentration camp since that's what's typical, but I'm not ...

Hey Selene! This is what I would call a music video poem. You know how some music videos go from image to image without any congruity? This is what this ...

Hey Joy! I did tell you I would look at your stuff? No? ;) I want to point out something to you! Look how many adjectives you have! A satisfied ...

Oh dear, I'm not sure if I like where this is going, lol! Highly scandalous! :D Okay, so you asked me for some adviceso... here's a game which might be ...

Wait! What??? XD You start off with a happy snow scene and then the girl forgets about the snowman because she falls asleep? And then, when she realizes what she's ...

Whoa, cool down, guys! :D First of all, there are a lot of grammar mistakes, like missed capitalization of names, etc., so I think you should go through and clean ...

To make it less explanatory ("This was back in the days when some animals still possessed magical qualities") consider having just a magician come to her and give her the ...