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Hey anima! :D First, some nitpicks: As the sun regains it's majesty, I open my eyes to it's glory.

Hey Vera! What an awful relationship! She's with him... why? I don't know. While I was reading the poem, I kept thinking, "Okay, so we're going to find out what ...

Hey Random! Sorry about your friend. That's never cool. :( For your poem, trying making it a tad more specific. Right now, it sounds like somebody stabbed in her in ...

Hey Spiral! :D What this poem needs is some personality! We have a bunch of gloomy images, some laments about broken hearts... but nothing about you personally. And what can ...

Ooh! I like this poem! :D One thing that you may consider changing is the structure. At the end of every stanza, you have it break off in an ellipse, ...

Hey Awakening! :D First of all, check for spelling errors... there are a couple in here! Run it through a spell check and you'll see. ;) So! I liked you ...

Oooh! I really liked this poem! Very quirky and lovely... very nice. Definitely a star for you! Just a couple of grammar mistakes: Looks like its a pretty cloudy day.

Eek! The first three lines are full of awesome. I love the way how you make happiness dance... it's very pretty! So a star for you! :D The main thing ...

Awesome layout! :D The poem needs trimming though! There are a lot of useless words that are mostly there to fill in the staircase layout--which is awesome! I love the ...

Hola! This, to me, seemed like a watered-down version of a psalm, which is really sad! I love the psalms... it was a combination of psalms, Shel Silverstein, and Pablo ...

Hey Rockstar! :D This poem seems less like lyric poetry and more like lyrics since you have a repeated section over again. Just so you know! If you want me ...

But, but! Science is awesome! :P This poem reminded me of Walt Whitman's When I Heard the Learn'd Astronomer ... which is a good thing! I like that poem. However, ...

Hey midnight! Welcome to YWS! :D Nice poem! I like the beginning especially. One thing I noticed though.... the first part seemed to be addressed to the reader, which I ...

Eek! Cute poem!

Hi slandie! Welcome to YWS! :D I like the musings of love in the beginning. But... well... there are a lot of "me" "I" "my" in this poem. A lot. ...