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Hey there, Kagi. :mrgreen: Well, the point and the message you were aiming at was pretty cleanly developed here I think, and you did it in such a short span ...

Hey there, Chad. :mrgreen: (It was Chad, wasn't it? D: ) Bud! Anyway, seems I've finally gotten around to reading your poem. I know, I'm slow aren't I. A bunch ...

Hello! :mrgreen: So... I guess the first thing that sort of stuck out to me was the point of view in the beginning. Maybe I'm just really tired, but the ...

Hey, Cotton. :mrgreen: I have to say, first and foremost, that this really was very cleanly written. In my opinion that usually tends to stand for a lot. When your ...

Hey there, Nike. :mrgreen: So I think I sort of get the point of your little story here. Though I'm not exactly sure I could really call it a story. ...

Ohai, Rachel. :mrgreen: Hmm.. Could you be this character in your story? It seems likely considering the name similarity and all. I have to say, I very much do favor ...

Hello, Kamas lad. :mrgreen: So I read your story, and I think I kind of get what you were trying to so here. I respect the morbidity of it. It ...

Why hello there. :mrgreen: So this seems like quite the interesting little story you have going here. It's based in a more medieval century, am I right? I can only ...

I want to marry this poem *clears throat* Hello, Lumi. :mrgreen: So. I want to say that there is something that I can helpfully critique on, but I am not ...

Hey, SubjectBlue. :mrgreen: So I see this is for the fear contest. o.O Spooky. I've tried writing fear before myself, but it always seems to be a tad bit challenging ...

Hi there :) So, I think this story is pretty obvious in itself. I understand what's going on, and I get that cancer is the object of conflict here. I ...

Sup, Oddkid. ;) So I think that your story is thriving in the sense that it has almost the same level of consistency compared to previous chapters. There's still that ...

Hey, Dragonlover :) So I read your poem, and it seems to be pretty simple in itself. I think you were definitely struggling a little bit when it came to ...

Hey, Lava. o.O So I think I kind of see what you were doing with this, but stories like this always seem just a tad bit too short for me ...

Hey, Bud. xP Soo, it seems like you already have two awesome reviews on this. Leaving me with not much else to say as far as improvements to be made ...