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Hey there, Ofir. Here to lend a review for you. (: He's a thirty four year old child, or so (Using the words "or so" here through off this sentence ...

Hey, Gracie (: Here to review for you. Yeah, I could see what you were meaning when you said it seemed a bit clunky in places. But since this poem ...

I have to say, this was very nicely written and thought out for the most part. Although, in some places I found it a little difficult to stay interested in ...

Wow, Ty. There's a lot I can say about this piece. And as I was reading I started to phrase in my head all of the things I liked and ...

Hey, DarkRain. First off I would just like to say that this was a very original and organic sounding piece. There was nothing remotely cliche about it. I appreciate that ...

Here to review! Hold on to your hats.. Okay, so the obvious things: There's always a rainbow on the horizon, (I'm not so sure you need this comma here.) after ...

Hello, Mabes. Here to lend a review for this. (: I'll start with the edits and comments in red. Bello Baque got lots of comments on his name. Often (,) ...

I noticed quite few little grammar things that could use fixing. I guess I'll just begin by pointing those out for you first. Then someone stood in front of me ...

Hey there, Dreg. This was a pretty cool poem. Although, I have to say I didn't quite care for such over use of the word whore. Specifically here in the ...

In the crossed-line of melancholy, One sits and waits patiently (.) Period seems cleaner here. Smiling at chaos (,) Praying to loss. (This is a nice stanza) One feels clumsy ...

She is the girl with the rainbow smile, And as she lies, Inside she dies, And when she cries, She says bye-byes. (I think you should change this to "good-byes". ...

Poor ehte. Him and his vagrancy. This was a really nice poem. One thing though: It's a remnant of my weakness (;) eventually it all causes infliction. That just didn't ...

First of all, I want to share to you my story when I was not yet born. (This first sentence doesn't sound so smooth. Maybe re-written as, "First off, I ...

I have to second Sarg's reply. There was almost nothing to this. I see the aim for simplicity, but this was a little too simple. Causing it to carry on ...

Kafka, Kafka. . . Are you sure you're thirteen? :P I'm stunned at the poetry you make. It's so effortless, each time. ^-^ Not fair. I really liked this: I ...