Smilykid
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The strongest aspect of this piece is the strong sense of atmosphere. You are very skilled at crafting the mood of the scene. I liked the mannerisms if the character. ...
Jun 26, 2013
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I like this piece because you definitely make the reader (or listener for that matter) FEEL the pain that this person is going through. The words are very personal and ...
Jun 26, 2013
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I share these exact same feelings about writer's block. It can be the most frustrating ting in the world for a writer. I would say that the piece is a ...
Jun 26, 2013
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I really like this. You use very good imagery and that is something that makes a poem for me. I would say I agree with the previous reviewer that you ...
Jun 26, 2013
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I agree with the other reviewers that you definitely make the reader feel for the character's sister. I feel the setting could have been established a little more, like what ...
Jun 26, 2013
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I agree with Alceste that it was a little fast in places and could have used some paragraphing. However, the story is very Hunger Games-esque and it has some real ...
Jun 24, 2013
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Hi Bugslake! I see you're new on YWS, congrats on your first post! I really like this story and especially the idea you have going on hear. Many people here ...
Jun 24, 2013
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This is... very good. There's something very soft and comforting about your writing style. It really breathes life into the setting and what you're writing about. I only found a ...
Jun 22, 2013
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This chapter is a very engaging read. From the very beginning I could tell by the way the character was sneaking around that something was amiss in this setting. Your ...
Jun 21, 2013
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This chapter is a very engaging read. From the very beginning I could tell by the way the character was sneaking around that something was amiss in this setting. Your ...
Jun 21, 2013
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What's up, Rage? I LOVE this poem. Seriously. I'm a fantasy buff, so anything about barbarians or Norse mythology just gets me. WIth that said, I really like your rhyme-scheme. ...
Jun 20, 2013
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Let me start off by saying that I think you have a really good idea on your hands. With that said, I liked where the story was going, but only ...
Jun 20, 2013
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I like this poem. I think the layout that you have is unique and it really kept me interested. The opening line immediately catches the reader because, honestly, I think ...
Jun 20, 2013
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This is interesting, in a good way! I think the strongest thing you have going for you here with this story is your character, obviously. She is a very likable ...
Jun 19, 2013
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Hey, great story! I'm not going to pinpoint grammar and punctuation mistakes as the last reviewer did a good job at that. This is more of a holistic review. To ...
Jun 19, 2013
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