SmileLikeUMeanIt

Hey there. I really enjoyed reading this. It's cute. My favorite lines were: If one day I'd start a family I would be truly happy If one day I'd get ...

I like it. I agree that this is very well writtten and it's nice the way it is. But I really don't like the "create envy" part. I guess you ...

I think everyone covered the grammar and spelling and stuff. But I just wanted to say that I could really feel the emotion in this poem. With the breaks and ...

I really like this! It has a beautiful simplicity to it. It's very interesting and I don't quite understand it all but it's one of those poems that start to ...

I don't have much to say about this but I just wanted to add that I really enjoyed reading it. I've read a couple other of your writings and I ...

I really like this poem! I especially love the last line. It's so cute and sad at the same time. I don't want to go too deep because I hate ...

I liked this poem. I understood it well. I will have to disagree with the comment above. I think it does create emotion in the reader. It did for me. ...

I really enjoyed reading your poem! It was like watching a movie. There were a few places that confused me though. I had to read some lines over to understand ...

I really enjoyed reading this. It reminded me of a Paramore song. I loved the line "you will forever be haunting me ". The only thing I'd change about this ...

I really like it! In my mind, all of the roses seem too wonderful to be real. But that's what love feels like, so it works. :) In the 4th ...

Great start! I love the character names. The first line is terrific! (I would change 'their' to 'its' just because grammar stuff.) I like the simple sentences. By removing some ...

I like it! It's very emotional and I can feel what you are writing. It's very interesting and packs a lot of things in there without being annoying. Don't let ...

I like the poem! I love the similes you used but would like to see some different adjectives. It's very inspiring! I'm stuck between two things of what the poem ...

This is very good for a twelve-year-old! You are on your way to becoming a great writer. :) You have a few grammatical errors, as WonderingKate pointed out, but they're ...

I love your straight-forward sentences. They are so simple while feeling professional, like the words of a published writer. My only advice is to change the first word. I like ...