Slammoth

Someone asking me to review a piece? I'm flattered. Let's see then. Chapter Two Daniel and I were at the shopping centre. Yeah, all right I know, classic loser teenager ...

Hi there! I'll now do a magic trick! In this post, I shall give you an exact copy of your works, only mangled! :D Let's begin... Prologue The darkness chased ...

Hi there! Let's see whatcha got... Commenting in red! Now I understand this is an unfinished, under-development thing, but I'll be giving you points to give us more info on ...

I thought this was extremely well written. The only thing I can get nitpicky about is that dividing the text a little may have made it even easier to read, ...

Hi! Gotta say, your piece left me with very mixed feelings. You use a lot of complicated words and obviously know how to produce elaborate writing, but I get the ...

I can tell its a good one from the fact that it captured my attention in the first sentence. My kind? What kind, I wanna know more... Result, read on. ...

Around for centuries, this, yeah - Would think that we'd have come up with a method of raising our kids out of it by now, but nooo... Ah well. No ...

Ahh, the story(book) continues. Let me thee... Chapter Two Barkley was lying on her bed, sleeping. She laughed as she watched his legs twitch as if chasing something. S h ...

Hullo! I saw this story lacked in-depth reviews, so I thought I'd come to the rescue! Hmmms.... Knighting a Vampire : What havoc it can cause News spread through the ...

Hoo boy, that was very good. This is the kind of text that I try to achieve, with varying degrees of fail. Very well done thar. The nitpicky has mostly ...

Hi there jules4848! You asked for a review, so here I am! Let me thee... -Prologue: Withering Castle- Breathing softly I did my best to resist the temptation to sneeze. ...

Here we are again, me and the cloak ! Let's see whatcha got! 1 (pt 2) We landed somewhat more gracefully, this time into my bedroom. Tobias rapidly let go ...

Awh, nobody's requested me to review a piece before. I just couldn't refuse, so here you go. *Dons the red critique cloak once again* 1 The lightning lit the sky ...

Well done! Looks like a promising start thar. Right, a couple of thoughts! Your grammar is fine, in fact the only error I could spot was that your last sentence ...

Ok. I've read both books, and I thought they were okay. As in, not absolutely mind blowing. Why? Too many clichés. Dragonriders, dwarves in mountains, mysterious elves, a farmer boy ...