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Plagiarism.

this is truly bitter and meaningless. i agree with your point, which is that people should be free-thinking individuals. but by attacking them like this, you're just playing their game. live and let live. that's how i live my life, and it's worked out pretty well for me. don't let their behavior get to you. put yourself above that.

I love it
It's so true. To the person that said most popular people are not that horrible - actually most of them are (or at least the one's I know)

Even if they're not horrible they're still horribly small minded. Ugh how I detest popularity. The title's great too - it's really fitting!

It's bittersweet. The total truth of how much reality hurts.

I thought it was a nice piece also. I've never tried to be popular. In fact my mom once told me 'Cassidy if you're going to lower yourself just to make somebody like you,don't because by the time you lower yourself to their standards it won't be worth it'. Sometimes I would've loved to be 'popular' whatever popular may be. I'm popular with the crowd of people I may hang out with. In some years that would be the 'oddball' group. I mean we were not really odd it was just that people looked at us as odd. Anyway its a good piece.

I thought this was a nice piece, sarah. Just because one person doesn't like it *coughicarusscough* that does't mean it's not good. There will always be someone who doesnt like it, you know?

I thought it was good, maybe not fantastic, but good.


Get some confidence! please!


I need to work on that too


all the best


---Jon---

Well, I suppose it was awful.
I admit defeat ashamedly.
*Hangs Head*

I thought it did sound a little like the stuff I write when I've got the temptation to blow somebody off. And the thing is, it always works: glad you wrote it. It gives those of us who have felt like you a sense of understanding. Check the piece for typos-I spotted a few misused words and stuff. Growing should be throwing, and there were a few others like that.
Still conveyed the message very well. keep writing!

Around for centuries, this, yeah - Would think that we'd have come up with a method of raising our kids out of it by now, but nooo... Ah well.

No new points there, it's all been pretty much said elsewhere a million times. Good to say it again though! It's just too bad the 'cool kids' tend not to take the time to indulge in 'nerdy' activities such as reading. They might learn something about life.

You do seem a bit bitter though, angry even (Like someone pointed out up there in a rather upfront manner...) I honestly don't mind, since your arguments seem pretty much sound to me still, a little bit of emotion put into the text works wonders. It'd get dry otherwise, I think.

Blargh, I meander again. Right, a few things.

You're going for a bit extreme words and views here, aren'tcha? I doubt many teenagers fit your view of the 'popular kid'. True, there are some really nasty people out there who honestly aren't worth anyone's time, but most people are just a bit insecure, go along with the flow due to peer pressure, don't understand the consequences of their actions (How much a single word can hurt!)... And so forth.

Now I'm not saying it's right, what would be right is to have the strength of will or the perception to break out from the wrong (harming others), but remember that most people aren't monsters, and have quite humane reasons for being who they are - And I'm pretty sure that most feel bad about what's happening to the underdog, it's just that everyone thinks everyone else accepts it... And strength of will required to intervene is hard to come by in a teen environment, where everyone tends to be at least a little bit insecure.

I have faith in that, anyway. I hope I'm right.

Oh, and about that beaten track of yours - You could look at the other side here again, consider that the 'cool kids' won't have it easy either, especially in the years to come. Coping with inner insecurity plus the endless drive to be on top, along with possible consequences for the cool things they try, like smoking and excessive drinking... It's a bit nasty to think, but doesn't it bring a sort of morbid satisfaction?

It's their choice. In most cases, the 'cool people' tend to become uninteresting, mainstream with mainstream views. Those who dare to be different bring change, hopefully for the better.

Woah, this ended up kinda long. Anyway, keep ranting, and regards from someone who has been pushed around by the coolios for years in the past!

PS. A little thought regarding Parisanmilo's view: Why should we just 'deal with' (ignore) behavior that's proven to be very unhealthy for everyone involved plenty of times, regardless of how long it's been around?

gosh icaruss, that was harsh


well anyway, i kinda agree with his main and basic, underlying thought about the piece, it's pretty typical and it's called school politics, humans generally want to be good in something, and acceptance, it's just an insecurity, or something they think their lacking, or whatever.

anyway, if that friend thinks your not popular and tries to make you someone you're not, then why hang out with her?

so back to the point, it's something that's been going on for centuries already and there's already tons of pieces and media out there that's about this. it's something you have to live with and get over.

oh, suggestion: you can try satire. mock the childishness.

This is the most bitter, hateful piece I've read here. Really, it's quite awful.

It's been edited for those little mistakes

Hey Demeter!

Thanks for reading the piece (:

Well, I'm not actually that sure what this piece is about (wow, that makes me sound clever now, doesn't it ? *rolls eyes at self* )

It's not in sympathy with the popular people (i know, i'm evil ), but it's about how they're not that cool. It's basically a warning not to get sucked into it all

Wow, thanks for quoting from my story, hehe it's the first time anyone's done that I think im going to dedicate the book to you now, hehe

--Sarah

xxxx

Hey, Sarah

You do have a point there. It's sad how people often call the loudest, the prettiest, the thinnest, and the most wanted girls popular, even though some of them are more of cold and cruel. I consider people popular when they are friendly to others and people want to be their friends because they're so nice, not because they're good-looking. You know how the stereotyped "bad girls" are in some people's opinions "popular"? (Like Kirsty Brightman? ) I know myself a couple of these "popular" girls, and I always thought it was so pitiful when some very kind, but unfortunately also unsure, girls wanted to be like them.

However, I wasn't so sure about one thing: was this piece about these not-sure-of-themselves girls who want to be "popular", or the "popular" girls who aren't so cool after all? I take it's the first one?

I'm sorry, I'm a little tired, so my words may seem somehow weird. Hopefully that doesn't disturb you


Demeter xxx

Thanks so much for your input

I was so scared people would get mad at me for having a rant

Yeah I know, friends are always dragging me over the boundary to the popularity line and I always refuse. I hate it when people try to change themselves to fit in. It's really sad.

Jeans rock

Thanks a lot.

Sarah

xxx

For some people, it's not one of those 'duh' things. One of my friends wants to be popular. She knows she's not perfect and will openly admit to it, but she wants to be. She tries to drag her un-popular friends (me) along with her, and trys to make them something they're not. She'll try to convince me to go to the mall or something with her and I'll flat out refuse. She refuses to give up for a few days. Other times, when I actually want to be part of her conversation, she blows me off and says "You wouldn't want to know, Kit Kat."

I completly agree with all that you wrote, though. It's sad how often people that love wearing jeans get looked down upon because of it. I mean, contrary to the popular people's belief, there are those of us who wear what feels comfortable and would rather spend time online than going to a football game, because they don't feel comfortable with the people that go to them.

Since I'm not exactly sure how to critique a non-fiction piece and I already gave you my opinion, I'm going to point out a few grammar errors:

they are not friends with eachother, they are more like mortal enemies,

Isn’t it true that people will do anything to be emotionally unstable, have no true friends, and oh yeah, have everyone you trusted stab you in the back.

Power is like a symbol to them. It’s a symbol saying “I control you.”