SisterItaly

Malcolm, didn’t get give two damns what we did, the boy was charcoal in a coffin. Waking up, it had been a week since the squirt s death, “So... you ...

I like it :) PM me when you post more! keep up the good work! ~Rent :) She doesn't have to PM you, just subscribe to this novel and check ...

Wow... creative, spunky, amazing! (*when you do this no * are needed.*) (More like this.) Clever and funny twist on Jack and Jill! You have just proven ninjas can be ...

Right off the bat, you forgot to capitalise in spots! Capital letters are important. Her, in the second sentence, who is 'her'? ~ummm, bell? i think we should turn back~ ...

Ok, it was nice and I liked it but... Oh great the but here we go again... joking! Now It's nice but you have a lot of mistakes my friend... ...

Nit picks I layed laid across the backseat of Jake's car. It's laid, not layed... I'm pretty sure. I wish I could understand what the big deal is... I'm sick ...

I am trapped in my own head, My mind like prison walls. - My favorite part I couldn't find any spelling mistakes, or punctuation problems, me and grammar aren't that ...

I like it! Good job Craftyness! Kinda isn't a word, it's slang, use kind of. Could use some periods, not just ellipses and commas. Crunch Crunch Crunch should be > ...

There was a light , forgot the comma. When I looked up, To the sky from the ocean, But as I sank further, Send this down to the next line ...

*Sorry if this review sucks, I was almost finished it then I lost it yikes!* Here you go. Here's my thoughts, Send this down perhaps? my many pages of thoughts. ...

Tip top, chop shop Tee-shirt too big half white, not right, two lost buttons , comma possibly? fell off last night. Tattered, battered blacks and blues, ice cold tosies, toesies ...

Where's the punctuation? No commas, periods? How are we supposed to know where to stop and take a breath? And Ain't, isn't a word. The girl not only has two ...

I really like it yuri! I like the way it sounds when I say it out loud to myself, *yes I read it outloud, earning me a few annoyed looks ...

If there's a pencil, It's in my hand. If there's a notebook, It's in my lap. If there's an idea, It's in my mind. If there's a chance, I'm taking ...

Those light summer days passed Like apple tart and crème brulee, The crumbs of which sat on chipped plates Atop a checkered tablecloth, Flashing red and white, Underneath a mango ...