Trapped

Thanks Nathalie, and Allmixedup! This is one of my first attempts at poetry, and I'm glad for the feedback.
Camryn

I am trapped in my own head,
My mind like prison walls.

I like your poem! It is very interesting. I could find a kind of rhythm easily! Very nice. Maybe some more explenation, but on the other hand it gives a kind of mystery about the poem and a good way to interpret it in your own way. I like it!

Xx Nathalie

Okay! My corrections/suggestions are in red, sections that could use rephrasing are blue.

I am trapped in my own head,
My mind like prison walls.
The barbed wire memories retain #FF0000 ">(word choice? What are you being retained from? Perhaps ‘contain’ would be better.) me.
And everyone else, like security cameras.
Makes sure I don’t escape.
#0000FF ">The sentence I have been ordered,
Longer than most,
A lifetime. #FF0000 ">(This is awkwardly worded. You need to rephrase or add in some words. You should be able to read it aloud and have it flow and make sense, that’s the general rule for poetry.)
I am in solitary confinement.
My secrets are the barking dogs that guard my cell, #FF0000 ">(This is a nice line, but there are no dogs in modern day solitary confinement. I think you should do some research. Is this modern day?)
Higher security than Alcatraz. #FF0000 ">(This doesn’t make sense modern day. Alcatraz is no longer a working prison. And even in olden days, Alcatraz was the highest security in the world.)
My conscience is always there,
To remind me,
When I might escape,
Just how badly I could get hurt.#FF0000 "> (this line sort of… sucks the emotion out. It needs rewording. ‘just how badly I could get hurt.’ Is obvious. You’re not going to escape from a prison unscathed. And if this prison is as high security and solitary confinement as you say, there’s no plausible way for this person to escape anyway)