Sionarama

Hi fireandice! THIS IS YOUR FIRST REVIEW!!!!! Alright, so this is a very short poem and I think it can be expanded but.... the first line is a little to ...

Hai lee-anna!! Alright, lets get down to buidness! My dislikes will be in green My likes will be in purple My corrections will be in red My comments will be ...

Hi Adeera!! This is sionarama in a more in-depth comment! Alright, lets get started! Prolouge: Nice descriptions, but as kr1117 said, you don't need to describe the baby right off ...

Hi Ilovemyboys!!! My Corrections will be in Red What I Like will be in Purple And the stuff I Didnt like will be in Green First of all, I was ...

wow!!! This is a hilarious poem though kinda confusing... but, remeber, its nonsence! your lines are divine very fine!! like my praise poem? Only a few lucky ones get it... ...

That summer was the beginning. It was when I began. Began to listen, to see, to feel. To love. Music, clothes, people, whatever took my fancy. All intensified by the ...

Hey yuri!! My corrections will be in pink! :) The Best Thing about You As I looked upon your angelic face, I could be in heaven now. The way you ...

This is amazing! Great structure (hint hint) and nice rythem. The one thing I didnt like was about the wind. I would have said something like the trees scraping my ...

Hey Eran!! :) I love this subject!!! I'm a little confused about the world having 3 2010s...... That's okay though. I like the things you can change into. I'd probably ...

Hey Brother Dearest! I'm here (as always) to comment on your lovely work!! My corrections will be in pink (not really my color is it? Oh well.) Matt paced through ...

April 8th, 9:08 Wednesday My bedroom Great. I've just had some wonderful news from the almighty(otherwise known as my dad). We're not going anywhere on holiday this year. I swear ...

My corrections will be in blue: Tori paced through the corridors of his mind. He couldn't find the right thing to say. And then it hit him. He walked to ...

Awwwww! This was SO cute and romantic!! The storyline was great but it didnt seem very real. First, he tells this girl he likes her and she cries. This makes ...

They had never come back. 1) She looked excited. “A Poptart?” “Exactly.” Tara squealed. 2) “Can I have a girl spend the night?” He braced himself. Sure enough, there was ...

Wow. :smt022 I'm speechless. People don't do that a lot. This was an emotional and terrifyingly beautiful story. You put great descriptions and feelings. At first, I thought he was ...