Published July 17, 2010
To understand what can't be understood,
Is very hard to say the least.
Like making bread rise,
Without the yeast,
Impossible....
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I actually mean to say that this is just too short to be a poem. There should be at least two paragraphs I believe. But for one's interest I would not ask you to change it.
hmm i like it, makes you think.
What is your definition of a poem exactly?
To this poem which is actually a paragraph long, I wouldn't call a poem. I am not being offensive but I would just recommend you to expand it. But if you like it this way it is okay, but this can't be call a poem.
Haha thanks! Yes it is a short poem, because it is supposed to be short and to the point. And yes it is a rhyming poem, just the format doesn't need any more rhyming because it is so short. Also I kinda like the way the poem is slowly growing smaller. And if I added more words with impossible, it would take the emphasis building up to the word impossible. But thanks for your review!
Hi fireandice!
THIS IS YOUR FIRST REVIEW!!!!!
Alright, so this is a very short poem and I think it can be expanded but....
the first line is a little to long for my tastes so I'd let the last "understood" have its own line....
so the second and 4th lines rhyme so is this a rhyming poem or not? Because no other lines rhyme...
so these are my corrections (I'll write your version than mine)
Yours:
to understand what can't be understood
its very hard to say the least.
Like making bread rise,
Without the yeast,
Impossible...
Mine:
To understand what can't be
understood,
Its very hard to say the least.
Like making bread rise,
without the yeast
Impossible to say...
Other than that, I LOVED IT!!!!! Its a very thought provoking poem and its very interesting.... have a great day!!!!!
CHOW FOR NOW,
sionarama