Sins

Hey there! I'ma actually here early for once :P his sharp-featured face bears an anchor beard and, like Alexandra, he had deep blue eyes. Tense slip up! Paula also has ...

So sorry for taking, like, a decade to get to this. My week turned out to be far more hectic than anticipated. The kitchen was a cacophony of sounds, smells, ...

Why, hello there. I really feel like our MC's voice comes alive in this chapter, and it's super amusing. His fear at the prospect of having to watch some random ...

ohhidere. I feel like I've taken ages to get to this, but you only posted it two days ago so I guess I haven't. Idk, maybe my mind is rapidly ...

IT'S THE FINAL PART. (that you've posted) I placed the tray down like there was gunpowder and two flints touching on the tray instead of simple tea and syrup-filled dough ...

Wasssuuup! I feel like I've taken ages to get to this, even though you only asked me to review it on Friday... It's weird, man. I'll start off by saying ...

Let's dive in, shall we? :P Ihit watch me walk out of the armoury, arms crossed, but that ghost of a smile. I don't know if this is just me ...

Hey! :) As I'm sure you'd expect, I'm super happy to be getting a deeper insight into Hilda's past, home life e.t.c. I also love how you didn't just info-dump ...

ohhidere. You have an uber amount of super-duper awesome reviews on this already, and I'm 90% sure I won't really be able to build on them, so just to pre-warn ...

Y'ello :) Kerani is so sassy lel. Considering this is the end of chapter one, I'll give you a sort of overview thing where I'll think back over the past ...

You and your rewrites ;) I like that you have Ning and Meimei in this version now because as well as making things less confusing for the easily confusable such ...

Hey there DrFeelGood, here to review per request! I read your poem because hey, I like poetry, and I think it gave me a broader idea of hat's going on ...

I had to come back for more, goddamnit. Also, I read over my last review and realised that Kerani's name was written as Kerani half the time, and Karina the ...

It's me again :P So let's jump straight into things, shall we? The scene with Kerani's siblings was really sweet, and overall you wrote it very well. You struck the ...

Hey there, Costa! Sincere apologies for taking so long to get to this. I'd let my review requests build up, and along with my outside life, I've had a pretty ...