SimplyPersnikety

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She stumbled out of the restaurant, tears filling her beautiful almond eyes. Her brown curls were beginning to fall out of the elegant bun that she had spent so long ...

Ello! It looks like your in need of a review! So here I go. This chapter really needs help. ._. I don't know what I was thinking with some of ...

This is... interesting. I like how you describe things ie... Blue sapphire rain or moss covered forests. It's a little confusing though. Who is the woman? Your rhyming is good ...

Lost in a cloud of sorrow Nothing to look forward to I'm endlessly walking in circles Confused and alone Then a light appeared in front of me And I walked ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here. Anyhoo, on with my review! How come the stars never fail to come out? No matter how bad things get ...

Congrats on your first FF! I myself have yet to jump into that genre of writing yet. Anywho, here go's my review... Off he goes, after a kiss, a word ...

This poem is going into my favorite poem file. I really enjoyed the idea and the punctuation and spelling mistakes were very clever. I think it makes it a even ...

It was ment to be somewhat funny. Why ya so damn lazy? How many times do I have to tell you to mow that grass? Get off your lazy ass. ...

Katrina you have done your duty, Satan has erected your call Now in the fiery depths of hell the crowd is expanding Gostav is on its way you had better ...

Wow, This is a lovely piece of poetry! I agree with Wojovox. children stories and romances don't really mix well. I literally went "Huh?" and had to stop and reread ...

Very interesting, Like gamechanger10 and -save-ferris- I had no idea where this poem was going but I like had it turned out. Your rhyming was awesome-- kudos for that-- and ...

Very nice poem! It made me laugh! The ending is the best! "Then went home to change into something besides a strappy sundress" This entire poem is totally describing me ...

I like the subject but it's WAY to short. it feels like you just stopped right in the beginning of the poem. I'd really like to read more of it ...

Lovely! I love it! One of my favorite poems so far! I really like the ending. "You never have and you won't." FANTASTIC! It flows nicely and the length is ...