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Argh. Nevermind... apparently reviews mean something. So sorry! Hi! I really like the idea of this piece, though it's a tad bit cliche, especially in the beginning. There are some ...

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Hm, this is an interesting story. It's a bit hard to critique because the style reminds me so much of my own, but it'll be a nice challenge. So, in ...

Hi! I love the message that this poem is trying to get across, like seeing into the mind of a bully. Some of the rhymes do seem a bit forced, ...

Oh, this is really sweet and short and well written. I love how, for the most part, you avoid cliches. Perhaps change the butterflies-in-my-stomach line, describe it more originally, but ...

Hi! I really liked your poem. The repetition of words and phrases really fit. I love your style in this. There are some things I would change, but they aren't ...

Hi! This chapter really pulled me in. Although there were a few mistakes and places I would have worded things differently, it was really good. I didn't really notice too ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS. I really like your poem; it's so deep! But I think the lines could be shorter. I added in places where I think there could be ...

Hi! I like your poem. It does have pretty good rhyming; none of it seems very forced. In the second stanza, especially at the end, you lose your rhyme. I ...

Hello! Nice poem you have here. It flows pretty nicely. It could use a bit more feeling: it doesn't seem very dramatic and it seems really formal. The rhymes feel ...

Hello! I really like where you're trying to go with this; like how war costs so much in death tolls and how they're so meaningless, am I right? I just ...

Hello! In general, I noticed you had a lot of typos that could have been fixed by just proofreading it before you sent it here. As a reviewer, I know, ...

I have to agree with freewritersavvy. If you were going for humor, I don't really feel any. Neither does it have any feeling. You do use a lot of description, ...

I'm sorry, I don't think the punctuation matters too much. I mean, a bit of punctuation could obviously make the poem better, but the lack of it doesn't make it ...

Hello! In all, I think this piece has a lot of potential. It's pretty good right now, but it could use some editing. Also, I think you should go into ...