SilentRain

Well, I like what has been write, but this just doesn't tell enough. You state that there was a relasionship, but thats it. You don't really tell about the relationship. ...

Wow, this is a wonderful poem! It is written very well, the flow gets rocky sometimes, but, oh well... I'm sorry for what had happened, I can't really relate to ...

Well, I like the words and the theme, but the way you wrote this is just all out of whack. You have long lines and short lines and really long ...

Well, this is a great start. In the rest of the poem, like has been stated, add more imagery. The title is very chilced though so you might want to ...

At first, I was thinking that there might be a lot to change, but now I don't think do... I do have a few things thought... He fidgets in the ...

Hello, so, I like the theme. The poem isn't that bad but there are some things you should work on... You asked me why I never cried, when I saw ...

Hello! I really like this poem , I don't really have anything to say other then that it is great! Although, I didn't like the last two lines, to me ...

Ok, wow, I really hope I don't sound mean... So, first of, I found so many things wrong with this I didn't even finesh yet, I will read it as ...

Okay, this is my second shoot at reviewing this... I first one wouldn't post and I had to restart my computer... Hello, and welcome to YWS! I have a tendency ...

This is good, I got the feeling that you were tryinh to protray here... I do have a few suggestions though... I'm left behind , As you move on ,

Aww!! I like this poem! Its so sweet! I think though that you should state who "she" is. I'm not going to stand here and watch you burn

I really liked this poem, I didn't really expect that by reading the title. Fairground rides make broken hearts, or so I have come to believe. Toffee apples and candyfloss ...

Hello! I like this poem a lot, it is nicely written and sweet and simple... Go one or two things to say though... Same with the plants, the bees and ...

I liked this... I kinda like the title. If it weren't for the title I would have no clue what this was about. Or I would have to guess... There ...

Oh, I love this!!! Some times I find that a unedited three minate write is better then a write that took forever and had everything thought over and planned out... ...