Published September 8, 2010
Another second, another minute
Another hour, another day
Everything's always changing and moving
Another winter, another spring
Another summer, another fall
Nothing's ever the same
People change and grow apart
Yesterday's friend is tomorrow's stranger
Same with the plants, the bees and the birds
They're never the same, forever different
Time flies by
And I'm afraid to say
No one can change that
Nothing's ever the same
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I though that this poem held a certain amout of charm. I liked how it was short and simple. It was easy to understand and to relate to. This is probably just me but I didn't understand your pacing. Other than that it was a great poem.
Hello!
I like this poem a lot, it is nicely written and sweet and simple... Go one or two things to say though...
Other then that I think your good, other then what has already been pointed out...
~Rain~
I agree with simplycomplex you should have different stanzas, but besides that I just wanted to say this is awesome.
Know I didn't help,
A. S.
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Here to review. :3
The repetition here is fortunately not annoying and plus, it adds and emphasize depth to your poem very well. However, it could be better if you have added one or two lines after the third line, it feels like that the flow has been cut and seems hanging in my opinion.
This is impressive but is the word "change" a bit repetitive? Thesaurus is your friend my dear.
All in all:
This is really interesting to read. The structure or how you've written this is quite personal and emotional, in a good way. Though you might just want to clarify the point of what you really want to say to us. Sure the poem itself speaks about change, but what about it? In my opinion, add some spice, words that rhyme and some syllabic patterns. In that way this could be really awesome to read. The repetition effects here is quite good too. So that's all I can say. Hope I helped and PM me for questions.
Keep writing!
Peace out!
~yuri
I thought this poem was good and for some reason I really like the title, probably because I don't know where my time goes these days (Internet...?).
Anyway, I think dividing your poem into some stanzas would make it easier to read and it would look better, in my opinion.
So, good job, I didn't come across any grammar problems or anything.
Keep writing!
Thank you so much all of that really helped.
haha and anyone else who reads this please feel free to comment cause i could really use it.
Hi Watermelonspots. Welcome to YWS! I hope you get some good reviews here, as well as do a bit of reviewing, yourself.
I really like this poem. It's short and sweet with a very basic but valuable point. I'll just go through and edit some technical things.
Taking out the word "far" would do a lot for the flow of this poem.
Keep writing! I hope this helps!
- Abigail