Published September 10, 2010
Love is like a season,
sometimes bright,
sometimes dull,
it can be perfect,
it can be bold;
it can be colorful
like the season Fall;
it can be warm
like the season Summer;
it can be cheerful or life less
like the season winter;
then it can be renewed
like the season spring;
no matter what
love is strong.
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Capitalize seasons, make "life less" "lifeless". Overall a sweet poem, the ending was nice.
Hey BlackDahilia! I'm Kat, and I'm going to do a quick review ;D
Okay, so, first off, this is sort of short. Which is okay, you don't want to drag along too much in a love poem, because that can open doors for the sneaky clichés. I, overall, appreciated the reading of this poem, but I don't really think I am going to remember it, simply because it appeared to be very common to me. It was very simple, very easy to understand, but that was it. It was very plain, in my opinion, and if you spiced it up a bit, I think it could turn into something memorable.
This is also a very general picture, which didn't really work for this case. If you could make it more interest into, different angles, different approaches to this theme. Some metaphors also would help. Well, overall, the only problem I could find with this piece was that it was very dull and common. But you're on a good path to make things better!
Good luck!
- Kat
I liked it, but just make sure that you don't capitalize seasons. And I didn't really like the placement of Fall, because for me it seemed like you were trying to rhyme it with dull, which I know you weren't. And for me, it just screws everything up. But other than that you've got a good theme and it makes sense. I really do like it.
-iheartbooks♥
Hello! I really like this poem , I don't really have anything to say other then that it is great! Although, I didn't like the last two lines, to me it seemed like a cliche ending to a great poem... Maybe consider changing it to something stronger...
~Rain~