Silberfee

Shujaa stopped briefly in a park, which had been put there originally for children when Bai Jian was still a functioning city I thought the use of both 'which' and ...

This is a really good poem, it captured the grief perfectly I loved it I just have a few edits to suggest: my face void of anything but sorrow I ...

Please, remain calm and stay indoors-" could say where the voice saying this is coming from or at least a description of what it sounds like. tv screen went black./ ...

This is a really sweet poem and overall I liked it. I especially loved the metaphor What would you say when you realize that you love the little birdie, who ...

With some revision this would make a great story, I did try to read it but because you squeezed the chapters into one long essay (posting it as one story) ...

Hi I liked the subject that the poem dealth with but as someone who is a little short sighted (I discovered I needed glasses three years ago I'm not very ...

Hello! I thought I'll have a go at reviewing your work and I'm quite pleased, you are a good storyteller, the structure is good and I have nothing majorly bad ...

internally overjoyed, Personally the word 'internally,' has scientific connotations for me so I would prefer to see a different word like 'inside.' Dunham’s blood near boiled at the thought of ...

Firstly I'd like to say that generally speaking I found the chapter well-written and strong personalities of the male characters stood out to me (because I would find it harder ...

Hi This is Silberfee for a quick review!! Firstly I like the fact that you are using poetry to increase awareness of a money obsessed society and how micro-lending helps ...

pushed off towards the computer room door, arms flailing in a poor rendition of Michael Phelp’s front crawl. Unless Michael Phelps is contextually revelant to this novel I wouldn't mention ...

Hello! Generally speaking I liked the story - its much more mature, imaginative and there is more action that the other stories I have come across so far on this ...

Hi! This poem is an improvement in terms of rhythm and I congratulate you on writing about a subject that reflects today's problems, I didn't say that in my previous ...

The rhythm is uneven because all the sentences varies in number of feet (syllables), I think it would be better if you formatted it like this so it emphasises key ...

I love the rhythm of the poem that is given by its shape, italics and space, it mimics the tone and theme of the poem, its slow, relaxed and empty ...