Shriek

I wrote something very similar to this junior year of high school, for an english assignment. We were to describe an outdoor scene, and so I did. I remember what ...

Hm. Well, not sure if I'm taking a look at the most recent edit or the first draft, so I will just make general comments: The beginning was fantastic -- ...

The prologue, though beautifully written, seemed to drag for me. It may have something to do with my impatience (like, get the story ON with already!), but the writing there ...

A very ... how should I put it? Straightforward poem. It wears its emotions on its sleeve, your poem does. Unfortunately, it is not enough to intrigue me. While I ...

Aha. Oh Bob, you never disappoint. This is a fantastic piece. It is beautiful because its personal -- and I can't relate. There's something romantic and untouchable about it, all ...

Eh. Jig, I'm sorry, but this fell a bit short for me. No doubt, the piece has it's strong moments. Your descriptive language is superb, despite your tendency to go ...

Brad: I liked that I could ask the question "Why?" between each stanza and get a response, and laced with gorgeous images at that. The "because" idea is ingenius. However, ...

It's a pity there aren't more reviews for this. It is a fine piece. Not perfect, mind you, but you're on your way. I am in accord with Cameron on ...

gummy, not sure i understand the title. i adore the images in the first three lines, although the "slitting the wrists" thing is a bit extreme in a poem this ...

OH MAN. That was cute. ... But, really, that's all it was: cute. As a matter of fact, you are a pro at cutesy. You've mastered the art of all ...

Gosh, you're talented. Give me some of that. Clever title, vivid, creative images ("melting city," ""Hades's iron teeth," "black balloons," "parade/baton," ooh, so good), and the final three lines cau

Hey, I've been meaning to read this for the longest time. So, yay, one thing to check off my five page to-do list. To be honest, the plot has been ...

Bob: Wow. This is gorgeous. Not in the way of flowery words and images, really, but in the power behind your words, and the insight your images provide. I am ...

This poem seems to encompass all the elements needed for a "good" poem: your figurative language is superb, and the words appear emotionally charged. I would agree with the reviews ...

I think I've been away from the YWS too long to know exactly who you're talking about ... but it seems that Snoink has remained just as witty (if not ...