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Re: Nobody, Chapter 2
hi writer, nice write... i like the name nobody. and the horrors introduced were cool too. this para- ""Suit yourself, kid, it's always nice to meet a stranger. But fair ...
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Re: Touch a woman you mistake for a rock and watch her melt into a fudge
hi writer, i come from the same cultural background. so i understand your writing. great work. it rhymed a bit along the lines of twilight at the start. the para- ...
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Re: The Games Of the Wild
hi writer, you have warned of the dangers of wild. the poem is filled with adrenaline. i loved the lines- " razor sharp claws spots rippling across it's fur the ...
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Re: The Gift- Short Story
hi writer, its a great story. kept me captivated. i loved lucia's transition from pre marriage to post marriage. the darkness already destroying her and making her do impossible tasks. ...
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Re: A Grammar Nazi visits the Doctor!!
hi writer, great piece. yes, i got the errors are intentional . and they are put in precise locations. mt congratulations on writing it. the idea was fresh and written ...
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Re: Medusa
hi writer, loved it, love it.... throughout the poem you kept me enthralled as to what comes nest. amazing piece. i would love to her more on the underworld gods ...
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Re: Don't Hold On To Me
hi writer, honestly, you poem gave me some mixed reading while reading it. the first line starts clearly enough- 'Don't hold on [beat.] to me. (2x) I don't need you, ...
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Re: ...
hi writer, i for one will definitely give you superpowers after reading this. its cool and totally right. and even i wish - "i would make all normal people cower, ...
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Re: Home of the Brave
well done. you have a clear idea what you wish to convey and go about it. the sentiments of the American to this would be similar to yours. the social ...
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Re: Artificial Love
Beautiful, just Beautiful.... Each stanza begins with different opening and then connects with the main idea of your poem. for the first " Standing on the corner of giving up ...
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Re: Don't Worry I was Already Chipped Before You Shattered Me
hi, i love the indentations made to emphasize on the words. they have a great effect. " p a r t ." and the start to the poem "blank stares"; ...
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Re: Halfhearted
first of all, it has a great flow. for this "My hands are shaking, My heart is breaking, and I didn't know it'd end this way. I'm sick of just ...
Sep 28, 2014
