ShakespeareWallah

Hi there. You have an interesting piece here. I feel, however, that the pouring-yourself-out-on-paper should have been a little more filtered out. There isn't much story here, which is fine, ...

Hi Wolf, Your prose is lovely, has a nice voice. Your descriptions are pretty and detailed, which I really liked. I gather you had a word limit but since you ...

Hey Ajt. I can even go as far as call him intelligent, as his knowledge in History (outstanding understanding of communism) and Science (I have to admit, he is much ...

Hey there. It is this thought that makes me cringe at the thought of being in a mixed ability set at school. I'm getting to many thoughts here. violence involving ...

Hey man. He even *looks* like Chapman What is this? if you want to put effect on "looks", just italicize it. You are writing an awesome story, not texting questionable ...

Hey there. Seriously- once in History I asked him to be quiet so I can take notes on the rather interesting video on Stalin-era Soviet Union. why is there a ...

Hey AJT! You are one writer I love reading. The one I know capable of fully writing a story that is creepy but will still seem cute like hell. You've ...

Hi! So why was he, a "perfectly sane human being" as he called it, standing in his bedroom, shaking with a gun in his hands? He has one gun on ...

hey man. As she tucked the single strand of hair that had fallen loose of her luxurious updo behind her ear, she just hoped this sudden change would be enough ...

Hey man. The world is falling. Not for the first time I fear. needs a comma after "I" Amy had obviously been crying, her streaked mascara and red eyes, she ...

Hey man. e had a loving wife, but she meant nothing to him; as he lay with his mistress between his thighs. this line is awesome. it is clear and ...

Hey there, A nice story you've got here. I could not find any thing to screw with in here. I like your descriptions very much. However, this is very short. ...

Hey Elinor, ...because let’s face it, takes at least a half hour to get anywhere in this city I remind myself that even the most famous A-List starts... For a ...

Hi! So she was content on watching him work in silence; secretly hoping to get a glimpse of his latest book. Your use of a semicolon here is wrong. Semicolons ...

Hi Aria, You don't have any basic problems. And your writing is really good. So I'll mainly focus on readability. For another moment, the mountains were peaceful. For a moment ...