ShakespeareWallah

Hi. From where I’m from Sakrant is an annual kite festival, and this piece seems to be, in a nutshell, about two talking kites who get philosophical and talk about ...

Woo! I like the ending. The whole carnation thing. The second part seems slimmer, like it feels like you got right into the action. So Chrys and Miles are frandz ...

Hi pomp. I wasted the last half-hour trying to figure what this trope is called at TVTropes. I didn’t. So I’m just gonna go with “shady-object-gets-locals-intrigued-and-slightly-annoyed”. This

yo. The second line’s ok. The “and” before “chatter” gets the confusion going. You could just reword it to prevent further head scratching. You could, ’cause it doesn’t look like ...

I have a general distaste toward immigrant fiction and all the clichés it comes with (the generational awkwardness, the poorly executed broken English, the foreign phrases and curses in italics). ...

I have by now given up trying to “get the emotions” right in my stories. When in doubt, I don’t give much effort to have my characters be surprised or ...

I used to play a drinking game. I don’t know if I can call it a drinking game since it wasn’t alcohol I drank, but it went something like this: ...

In Murakami’s “A Wild Sheep Chase”—I keep going back to him not because you have a certain affinity for him, trust me—the nameless narrator devotes an entire chapter talking about ...

Hey there. I want to start by saying I actually like this a lot. It's raw, and sports a kind of angsty sensibility that makes it interesting. I love the ...

Hey there. I like how you tried to put horror elements into this. It could work. I'm actually, as a reader, immensely interested to know more about Lauren. I like ...

Hey there. Writing an epistolary novel has both its ups and downs. You can do without a lot of descriptions that you don't want to give and even, at times, ...

Hi Urba. Nice seeing a Bengali here. So this was originally written in Bengali. Did you translate it only to get criticism or do you plan on working on the ...

Hi Redbox. Usually I like reading "Teen" stories even if they seem very predictable. Your main problem here is that you most probably rushed this. There are words missing and ...

Hi David. You have a nice story here, even though I have some issues with it. You do not give a lot of descriptions of the settings, and that could ...

Yo. With a little work, this could be a really interesting story. When I started reading it,I really hoped that the characters would have at least a little bit of ...