Shadowsun

This really should be longer before anyone can critique it properly. Please try to post more in the future. Okay. Here's my critique of this very short piece. The Year ...

I used to love all the redwall books! I haven't read them for ages though :( . My favourites would have to be Salamandastron , Long Patrol , Pearls of ...

Hi. First of all before I begin here's a rather short disclaimer. This is just my opinion! You do not have to do anything I say. Lucius Cain, a soldier ...

This is really good. I'm looking forward to more of it. I looked through it and could find only this one little tiny thing. Danteel hesitated, and tried as hard ...

Okay. Lets see what I can find. There are a couple of things, but the others have already got most of them. This is what I found: “Speak!” Demanded the ...

Sorry it took so long for me to get around to this, I've been busy lately. There are some small grammatical errors and I found some of the wording confusing ...

There's more! I've read it all through and the only thing I could find wrong with it was: He released Dosh and the mad Gypsie fell to the stone floor ...

Cool, this is getting really interesting now. Isn't the evil spirit meant to have red text though? Once more I can't find much wrong with it, save for what has ...

"Uncle John gave Jason his famous grin before stepping out of the way." You don't need the speech marks there. It's good, and I can only echo what everyone else ...

Ah... Poor Brad. I didn't expect him to link up with Whiperba though. I can definately see them both going something to try and stop the Mercenaries. This is coming ...

... Wow... That is amazing! I got so caught up in it... It's written so proffessionally, it's fantastic!! I have to read more. Ali Kemal seems a bit disturbed, but ...

This is moving along nicely, but it still needs a bit more description. There are a couple of things wrong with it though. A yellow-skinned humanoid from the planet Ree, ...

Very Mercenary like :D. They're splitting up over money :D. I can see Brad doing something that messes everything up for he other two. Anyways. It's getting better and better, ...

I can't really add anything that sokool hasn't mentioned. It's a good piece of writing but it lacks in information. Maybe it should start a bit before? Inform the reader ...

Cool, there's Dragons now :D. I'm looking forward to finding out what the Tenjin is. ~ Shadowsun :D