ShadowsKittykat

Aww, poor thing, nearly cried when she was raped and again nearly cried when she tried to kill herself, i know of too much suicide, i feel sorry for her. ...

Wow, very well written, it's kind of easy to see that something really bad is going to happen to Dee. I would love to keep reading, this story is very ...

More description maybe like this, just an idea "As the sound of the violin came to a close, the young girl silently cried for her comatosed brother." This isn't exactly ...

Naaw, that was sweet, I feel sorry for poor Jasmine, he made her feel special and then she finds him with another girl, poor thing. You did a great job ...

Naaaaaaaw, very sweet. You could have punctuated this a fair bit to make it look neat and tidy. A few spelling mistakes but even all the great authors have spelling ...

Omg, great story, I want to read more. You have done very well at pulling the reader, me, into your story, now please if you would happily be nice enough ...

Wow, that was very good, and very well written, I hope to read more. It seems to be styled differently to the stuff I normally read, so it was quite ...

Naaaaaaaaaaaaaw, thats soooooo sweet, your story is well written and extremely cute. Maybe you should try to write longer stories, with more detail this one could even become longer. Great ...

Thats a really good story, its short and too the point, you should make a detailed version of this story, so then you have your short story and a longer ...