-
Re: The Moon Spirit Chapter One
I think grey and gray are both correct, a matter of dialect. So use what makes you or the publisher happy!
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: Dragged Down by the Stone - Part Two: Jesus Freaks
I'm going to post this as a comment as I skimmed parts of it. But a few things I wanted to say: "6.The Communist Manifesto(Expected, seeing as if you are ...
Aug 11, 2013 -
Re: Empress Fallen - Chapter 2 - Part 1
Thanks for the reply!
Aug 10, 2013 -
Re: we are not/we are
I'm not completely sure, but is this in some kind of intentional, methodical rhythm? I tried counting the syllables, but it doesn't match up to anything I know (and that's ...
Jul 17, 2013 -
Re: Gears
At first I didn't notice the rhyming scheme. In the first two stanzas, I would recommend try fixing the flow and rhythm. Overall however, in the last five stanzas, the ...
May 25, 2013 -
Re: The Sunken Lands(Part 1)
Gah... there's supposed to be whitespace between most lines... Whatever. Don't feel like playing with this stuff right now. :P (I may edit later)
Jun 25, 2012 -
Re: The Beginnings of a Madman
Okay, I'm going to write a "review on the reviews" here for anybody else who finds themselves posting after the one's above. Everyone, I'm really disappointed in my self for ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Suburbs Map
Often I think a lot of authors want to do this kind of things but either don't have the means to do it, or its limitations placed by the publisher ...
Aug 9, 2011 -
Re: The Impossible
Hm... definitely I need to revise a couple things and sorry about the punctuation. That was a blind, sad mistake. :(
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Are you rejecting me?
I agree with VEE. It shows that the speaker is vain and conceited. It's all looks. There's no personality. I personally didn't like it. But, yes, it was different than ...
May 11, 2011 -
Re: Caution: Possible Virus
You need a period at the end. "Hiding has hunks" should probably be "hiding as hunks" Overall, it was good as always. --Skis
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Release Me
Make it a song. Gets some horns and bass in there. I could dance to this if it was given a good tune! There's the best review I ever wrote! ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: Emo Poetry -- A Note from Death
Well, I'm not emo, but I have friends who are. I don't know if this is really the thoughts that an emo person would have, but I can't speak for ...
Mar 18, 2011 -
Re: "Things I Don't Like" by Death
Meh. Four was funny, most others were pretty blah, but I'm still in the perverted humor stage. :D No real review, sorry! -Skis
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: If I Were a DC Writer [NOW AVAILABLE ON ITUNES]
I haven't been able to listen yet, but the lyrics are great. I like word packed songs. I don't have much else to say, too! --Skis
Mar 2, 2011