Sampson

First paragraph, you stated the fact that both female and male are in the club but you end saying that they could have sex wih any girl they please. So ...

"but they--whoever they are--are just waiting for the prime moment to strike. It could be any" those dashes should be a comma. Also prime isn't the best word in the ...

"The crowd of people stood behind her, her followers, seemed to solidly support her, as they chanted and cheered at her words." This is a really bad run on case. ...

This was certainly interesting. Your wording was... again interesting. I like the points you made and the whole "what if's are invalid" was brilliant. There's just one thing that gets ...

"The day started quite swiftly." you should be able to start off a piece better and more fluently than this. "Something which ripped my schedule, smashed my plans and tattered ...

"But one miraculous thing has happened, I have survived seven years of leukemia. My mom leaned over and hugged me." You should probably put a ; instead of a comma ...

In he first and second paragraph you don't end the quotes but instead begging another I too of the unfinished. "How can I know what you said is true?" This ...

no intro needed, this is a review. "'Central Park," Sadie answered for me." Since shes saying it with annoyance in her tone you should express her feelings in it; such ...

That was really sweet. Personally I love how it was written, in that format. I forgot what its called but I love it! The only real let down was how ...

Let's just dive right in to this whole thing: "I could distantly hear Ethan laughing his stupid butt off, and screamed, "SHUT UP!!!!'" This doesn't sound quite right, and is ...

Yup... uh huh... that was something... Okay I'm confused. I'm laughing but I'm not sure why. Am I just not poetic enough to see what's happening here or what... okay ...

I loved every part of this story. My favorite parts are as follow: The beginning, or introduction fi you will; where you talk about how death waits for no one, ...

Oh my god you almost made me cry... then I got to the end. That was hilarious. I have to say I was incredibly entertained and don't regret reading that! ...

Ahhh I love this poem so much! I have a sort of odd question, not that odd I guess. I run a blog with a close friend and sometimes when ...

First of all, whoa. Just whoa. That was intense. I personally loved this. That's really all I can say because right now I'm at a loss for words because, whoa. ...